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Chapter 16, paragraph 65

Did the author really have to name the island :Treasure Island”? Couldn’t he have picked a more normal name? It sounds like its straight out of an old pirate movie

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Posted December 21, 2010  1:11 pm
Chapter 15, paragraph 57

There is not enough information there to find him. There are probably thousands of 17 year olds in San Fransisco who aren’t straight A students. He didn’t give them his whole grade profile it was just a simple statement

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Posted December 21, 2010  1:03 pm
Chapter 14, paragraph 35

amidst all of this chaos and controversy Marcus still has time to think about typical teenage boy thoughts. For once I’m no saying something negative I actually like how he did this. It makes Marcus seem a little more real

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Posted December 21, 2010  12:58 pm
Chapter 11, paragraph 56

I think I’m getting to the point when you dislike something so much that every little thing about it starts to bother you even if those little things aren’t even important. It bothers me how every single person there just agrees to fight the department of homeland security. Not a single person says no. They all just agree to fight the government. Really? Really? No one is worried about their futures or jail or torture?

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Posted December 13, 2010  11:04 pm
Chapter 10, paragraph 64

I figured that Marcus would be the type of person that wouldn’t like being drunk. He seems like he would hate loosing control over his body and surroundings. He seems to always be in control or at least act like it so it’s strange that he would enjoy loosing all control.

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Posted December 13, 2010  10:52 pm
Chapter 10, paragraph 31

This whole explanation was so long winded and unnecessary. We don’t need to fully understand the tech stuff that is going on. A brief description or analogy would do just fine. If I wanted to read all this stuff I would just grab my computer manuel

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Posted December 13, 2010  10:46 pm
Chapter 7, paragraph 24

I feel like this whole situation is just so unrealistic. Call me naive but I don’t think the country will ever get to this point.

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Posted December 6, 2010  7:03 pm
Chapter 6, paragraph 40

Ok i this whole scene is so ridiculous. It is so unrealistic and obviously just put in to once again portray his anti-government message. it is really getting annoying how conspicuous these political commentaries are.

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Posted December 6, 2010  6:47 pm
Chapter 6, paragraph 13

It kinda bothers me how open the author is with the message here. Most books that portray a political message do it openly enough that you can understand it but it’s still subtle enough that it doesn’t overshadow the story. It seems here like he is just trying to shove his beliefs down the readers throat

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Posted December 6, 2010  6:44 pm
Chapter 5, paragraph 20

They basically broke him. It’s kinda freaky how before he was a carefree rebellious could that laughed in the face of his principal and now he is scared for his life. Prisons are supposed to rehabilitate prisoners into functioning members of society and I doubt Marcus will be doing anything illegal anytime soon.

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Posted November 29, 2010  9:35 pm
Chapter 4, paragraph 22

um… I’m confused. what does this have to do with his parents? It’s a group of mysterious and intimidating people imprisoning and questioning him. No parents involved; unless you’re comparing her to a nosy parent in which case I’d say that she is far from a nosy parent. She is more like an authoritarian, unloving, peacekeeper parent which really isn’t much of a parent at all.

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Posted November 29, 2010  9:30 pm
Chapter 3, paragraph 34

Yeah that’s probably exactly what he was going to do and although it seems pretty ridiculous it actually is quiet resourceful. Turn to the internet when there no one around to help

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Posted November 29, 2010  9:23 pm
Chapter 2, paragraph 18

It seems to me that Marcus is a very manipulative person. He likes to manipulate not only the people around him but also the system in general. Whats even worse is that he is very good at it.

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Posted November 22, 2010  10:47 pm
Chapter 1, paragraph 25

Well Marcus has obviously gone through this whole process many times before. He knows exactly how Mr. Benson will react and is in no way intimidated

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Posted November 22, 2010  10:44 pm
Chapter 1, paragraph 14

Was anyone else bothered by the fact that he used chat speak in his head? I guess it emphasizes how much time he spends on line but it’s still really annoying. I hate when people say “idk” or “omg” when they are talking. Is it really that hard to say the full word?

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Posted November 22, 2010  10:39 pm
Hello World! (your tester-post), paragraph 1

um…. Hi there

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Posted November 18, 2010  10:42 pm